vow you have got drastic improvement, the photos are much more poetic and symbolic. Also there is some sense of abstraction which gives more room for interpretation. But I would suggest you more restained in your selection. Whilst every image is quite nice in aestetic terms, some are not well connected with others in the narrative. For example, the first image tells little. if i were you, i would use the piano key as the start, as this is what links up the whole story. then may be your first picture, for the verticle structure builds the connection. and then i may use the grey-greenish rectangular picture, followed by the concert images and the starfish. in between the concert and the starfish, i may add an image of stage light the auditorium to symbolize the focus on the performer. I think the last few images of the collage of the book and the piano is good, but the photos are not advancing the narrative much. Indeed, it would be nicer if you end the series with an image of the hand covering the piano altogether, and deleted the last two as they do not match with the series. But it's a good start. keep it up
vow you have got drastic improvement, the photos are much more poetic and symbolic. Also there is some sense of abstraction which gives more room for interpretation.
ReplyDeleteBut I would suggest you more restained in your selection. Whilst every image is quite nice in aestetic terms, some are not well connected with others in the narrative. For example, the first image tells little. if i were you, i would use the piano key as the start, as this is what links up the whole story. then may be your first picture, for the verticle structure builds the connection. and then i may use the grey-greenish rectangular picture, followed by the concert images and the starfish. in between the concert and the starfish, i may add an image of stage light the auditorium to symbolize the focus on the performer. I think the last few images of the collage of the book and the piano is good, but the photos are not advancing the narrative much. Indeed, it would be nicer if you end the series with an image of the hand covering the piano altogether, and deleted the last two as they do not match with the series.
But it's a good start. keep it up